(III)
“No!”
You exclaimed as I said that
I was a corpse.
Yes! Yes, I am.
I have told you everything
You can’t deny the truth.
I’m lost. Lost forever.
I’m not the same anymore.
“You got lost.”
Yes, somewhere deep.
“Yet you are struggling.”
Yes, struggling
To make my plant beautiful again
But in vain. I can’t bloom
As it’s dark
Everywhere.
“Oh dear,
You never understood
Your true self.
Hear, what I say-
You were not a flower,
You are not a dead body.
You are the plant.
That dead flower is not you,
It’s a part of you.
You will bloom again.
All we need to do is
To deadhead you.
I promise,
You’ll bloom again.
I promise.”
Read Who is she? (I)
Read Who is she? (II)
Read Who is she? (IV)
I love that you revealed her!! She was the plant. Thats beautiful! I love that you gave her hope and a promise to thrive again. Not only plants need light, but we do too..we, along with plants, need attention, understanding and a helping hand to “dehead” us of the things we carry that keep us from growing. This piece is amazing! 🙂
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Yeah, all of us living beings are similar in some way or the other. I’m glad you liked reading it. Thankyou! 💙💙
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As promised I am finally here! I’m sorry it took me so long but better late than never.
I just wanted to start by saying that splitting your poem into three halves seemed so appropriate for the recurring metaphor of growth and nature. You’ve got such a pastoral scene going on that the three part structure kind of (Lion King reference approaching) mirrored the circle of life / growth. Part one is death; part two is a low point after death; part three is a new hope for growth and light. At least, that’s how I read it .
I also loved that you use second person address – that’s a really interesting technique that not a lot of people pull off but you did it really welly because every time you gave the “you” you were addressing dialogue, it was exactly what us, the readers were thinking. You knew at the end of part one that we would initially understand the budding flower reference but you anticipated that with the opening of part two. To me, this trilogy of poems uses the relationship between the person planting a seed and growing a flower mirrors the relationship between reader and poem; we get out of it what we put into it.
I also loved your end-stopped line “I promise.” So effective and just beautifully done!! 🙂
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Thankyou so much for finding out time from your hectice schedule just to keep your promise 🙂 I was quite happy with the idea that I had put into the poem but the way you’ve admired it, I fell a little more in love with this whole piece. ❤
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Wow, that was a pretty good conclusion to these three poetry ❤
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Thankyou Fanna! Glad that you liked all of them 💕💕 thankyou for reading 🙂
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I am constantly enthralled by you and the way you think and write.
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You appreciation means a lot to me Suze. Thankyou 🙂 ❤
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